Essay 2-01b My favorite place (revision)

I have a lot of favorite places. For example, my favorite places are my home, my grandmother’s home, parking at the park where I often go, amusement parks and hot springs. Those places make me happy and calm, so I like these places. However my most favorite place is another one. The place is the sea.

I was born in summer so I think that I like sea. I have liked sea very much since I was a child. I am going to write about my favorite sea now. I like the sea anywhere. My favorite spot is Sunset beach in Okinawa. There are blue sea, blue sky and beautiful landscape. I have been there and I love blue sea and sky of there. In summer, there is full of a lot of people because it is the beach where is popular among tourists. I recommend there to people who want to go sea in Okinawa.

What the most is floating with a float ring on the blue sea in summer. Then I enjoy to think various things and to watch the beautiful landscape. I can watch a lot of island, some ships and blue sky. I think that like this landscape is good. Blue sky makes my heart clear. I always cheer up at looking blue sky with white cloud and planes. Then the landscape to watch from the beach is different from landscape from on the sea. I am interesting it. Even if season is winter at the time, we can sit and think on the beach

Also I like sitting and thinking on the beach. A lot of living things, for example crabs, insects and birds, live on the beach. I like to watch them and I feel happy when I am watching it.

I like the tidal smell too. I am calm when I go to sea and smell the tidal smell.

I think that we can enjoy the sea in all seasons. The sea shows various expressions by season and time. Also the sea has power to calm me. I think that these are the good point of the sea. So my favorite place is sea.
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Essay 2-01a My favorite place

I have a lot of favorite places. For example, my favorite places are my home, my grandmother’s home, parking at the park where I often go, amusement parks and hot springs. Those places make me happy and calm, so I like there. However my best favorite place is another one. The place is sea. I have liked sea very much since I was a child. I was born in summer so I think that I like sea.

I am going to write about my favorite sea now. I like the sea anywhere. If I say daringly, my best favorite sea is Sunset beach in Okinawa. There are blue sea, blue sky and beautiful landscape. I have been to there before and I love there. In summer, there is full of a lot of people because it is the beach where is popular among tourists. I recommend there to people who want to go sea in Okinawa.

I like floating with float ring on the blue sea in summer. Then I enjoy to think various things and to watch the beautiful landscape. I can watch a lot of island, some ships and blue sky. I think that like this landscape is good. Blue sky makes my heart clear. I always cheer up at looking blue sky with white cloud and planes. I like the tidal smell too. I am calm when I go to sea and smell the tidal smell.

I wrote I like floating with float ring on the blue sea just now. However I also like sitting and thinking on the beach. A lot of living things, for example crabs, insects and birds, live on the beach. I like watch them and I feel happy when I am watching it. Then the landscape to watch from the beach is different from landscape from on the sea. I am interesting it. Even if season is winter at the time, we can sit and think on the beach.

I think that we can enjoy in the sea all season. The sea shows various expressions by season and time. Also the sea has power to calm us. I think that these are the good point of the sea. So my favorite place is sea.
(372 words, total: 3318 words)

Draft essay: My favorite place

I have a lot of favorite places. For example, my favorite places are my home, my grandmother’s home, parking at the park where I often go, amusement parks and hot springs. Those places make me happy and calm, so I like there. However my best favorite place is another one. The place is sea. I have liked sea very much since I was a child. I was born in summer so I think I like sea.

I am going to write about my favorite sea now. I like floating with float ring on the blue sea in summer. Then I enjoy to think various things and to watch the beautiful landscape. I can watch a lot of island, some ships and blue sky. I think that like this landscape is good. Blue sky makes my heart clear. I always cheer up at looking blue sky with white cloud and planes. I like the tidal smell too. I am calm when I go to sea and smell the tidal smell.

I wrote I like floating with float ring on the blue sea just now. However I also like sitting and thinking on the beach. A lot of living things, for example crabs, insects and birds, live on the beach. I like watch them and I feel happy when I am watching it. Then the landscape to watch from the beach is different from landscape from on the sea. I am interesting it. Even if season is winter at the time, we can sitting and thinking on the beach.

I think that we can enjoy in the sea all season. The sea shows various expressions by season and time. Also the sea has power to calm us. I think that these are the good point of the sea. So my favorite place is sea.
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Favorite place(s): Outline

－Favorite place－
Sea
　　▼ Features
　　　　➢ blue sea
　　　　　　• a lot of islans
　　　　　　• ships
　　　　　　• tidal smell
　　　　➢ a beautiful landscape
　　　　➢ good weather
　　　　　　• blue sky
　　　　　　　　• white cloud
　　　　　　　　• planes
　　　　　　• warm
　　　　　　　　• summer
　　　　　　• a cool breeze
　　　　➢beach
　　　　　　• living things
　　　　　　　　・ fishes
　　　　　　　　・ crabs
　　　　　　　　・ birds
　　▼ activities
　　　　➢ floating
　　　　　　• float ring
　　　　➢ thinking
　　　　➢ sitting
(65 words, total: 2404 words)

Favorite place(s): Brainstorm

• a beautiful landacape
• sea
• blue sky
• white cloud
• planes
  
• a lot of island
  
• warm
• summer
• float ring
  
• floating
• thinking
• beach
  
• sitting
• tidal smell
  
• a cool breeze
• ships
• living things: fishes, crabs, birds

(32 words, total: 2339 words)