portfolio for Writing Ⅳ

Student ID: 08126

Portfolio for Writing IV, Section 1A
(See: Note 1, below)

0.0. OVERVIEW

Reviews, Posts, Words, and More

(See: Note 2, below.)

1.0. ESSAYS

(See: Note 3, below.)


Please complete this table with data gathered from essays on your blog. See the Key (below) for definitions of the symbols in row one, and complete columns four through nine with numerical values (0, 1, 2, 3, ...).

1.1. Showcase	Short titles with links to blog posts	Dates yyyy.mm.dd	¶	W	C	L	P	M
2-01a (2009.10.07)	My favorite place	2009.10.19	5	372	0	0	0	0
2-01b (2009.10.21)	My favorite place (revision)	2009.10.21	6	361	2	0	0	0
(2-01c)
2-02a (2009.11.04)	Mickey Mouse	2009.10.28	5	420	8	3	1	0
2-02b (2009.11.18)	Mickey Mouse	2009.11.17	5	515	0	3	0	0
(2-02c)
2-03a (2009.12.02)	My Lerning Language History	2009.12.01	5	518	9	0	0	0
2-03b (2009.12.18/22)	Lerning Language is my life	2009.12.16	9	672	0	0	0	0
(2-03c)
Totals	---	---

Key:

¶: number of paragraphs five (5) or more sentences in length

W: number of words

C: number of comments

L: number of links

P: number of photos or other graphics

M: number of other media included in post

1.2. Most Improved Essay

(See: Note 4, below.)


Selection and Assessment: Which of the three essays that you've written and revised this semester shows the most improvement? What did you do to improve it? Remember that complete answers are better than short answers, focus on your writing (accuracy, appropriacy, content and organization, rather than graphics or other media), and explain at least two major improvements.

• I think essay 2-03 is the most improvement of the three essays There are two reason. One is that I changed the title. So I think that essay 2-03b became catchy. The other reason that I divided paragraph in detail, so I think that essay 2-03b is easier than before.
  

2.0. COMMENTS

Showcase	Short titles of posts with links	Dates of comments yyyy.mm.dd	Numbers of words in comments	Qualities of comments**
2.1. Your first comment on your instructor's blog*	Social Media and Social Networking Explained	2009.10.20	26	I wrote my opinion.
2.2. Your best comment on a classmate's blog*	essay 2-03a	2009.12.10	24	I wrote my opinion and question.
2.3. Best comment by a classmate on your blog*	My Learning Language History	2009.12.09	27	Hikari wrote her opinion and question.
2.4. Most comments on:	Short titles of posts with link	Dates of posts yyyy.mm.dd	Total number of words in comments	Qualities of comments**
2.4.1. Any one of your essays*	My Learning Language History	2009.12.01	155	Most people ask some question, so I write revision easily.
2.4.1.1. When did you respond to those comments?	---	2009.12.09	---	---
2.4.1.2. How did you respond to those comments?	---	---	152	I answered their questions.
2.4.2. Any of your other posts*	Mickey Mouse	2009.10.28	192	They write their opinion and some questions.
2.4.2.1. When did you respond to those comments?	---	2009.11.05	---	---
2.4.2.2. How did you respond to those comments?	---	---	96	I answered their questions.µ

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* Current semester comments on essays and other posts
** Please list the most important qualities of comments on each type of blog post. That is, explain briefly what makes comments good.

2.5. Recent comments display

Does your blog display recent comments from blog visitors in a prominent location, for example, in a sidebar, header, or footer widget? Where, or why not? Please explain.

• ... My blog displays recent comments in footer.
  

2.6. Additional reflections on comments

• .... About receiving comments, I could know that I had readers for my blog.
• .... Through giving comments, I had chance to read other classmates' blogs.
  

3.0. BOOK REVIEWS

3.1. Showcase	Short titles with links	Dates: yyyy.mm.dd	Words	Comments
Example:	Vampire Killer	2007.05.16	39	1
BR 2-01	The Pizza That We Made	2009.08.08	122	0
BR 2-02	The Teeny-Tiny Woman	2009.08.26	123	0
BR 2-03	The Gingerbread Boy	2009.10.01	122	0
BR 2-04	FLUFFY GOES TO SCHOOL	2009.10.13	153	0
BR 2-05	FLUFFY'S VALENTINE'S DAY	2009.11.14	195	0
BR 2-06	FLUFFY GOES APPLE PICKING	2009.11.16	215	0
BR 2-07	SMALL PIG	2009.11.24	182	0
BR 2-08	THE BOOKSTORE VALENTINE	2009.11.26	260	0
BR 2-09	The Little Mermaid	2010.01.08	202	0
BR 2-10	The Pied Piper of Hermelin	2010.01.12	185	0
BR 2-11	Brer Rabbit and the Tar Baby	2010.01.15	184	0
BR 2-12	Icarus	2010.01.15	182	0
BR 2-13	The Sun and the Wind	2010.01.15	144	0
BR 2-14	The Ant and the Grasshopper	2010.01.15	138	0
BR 2-15
BR 2-16
BR 2-17
BR 2-18
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Note: Please calculate and list book review Totals for words and comments without including those from the example (above).

3.2. Best Book Review

Selection and Assessment: Which of those book reviews do you feel is the best that you've written this semester, and why? Remember that a complete answer is better than a short answer, focus on your writing, and give at least two reasons to support your assessment.

• My best book review is "The Sun and the Wind" because I think that Icould summary this book well.
  

4.0. BLOG LAYOUT, LABELING, LINKING, and MEDIA

Showcase	Yes	No
4.1. Does your blog display an archive?	√
4.1.1. Does the archive display the titles of posts?	√
4.1.2. Is the archive organized by month?		√
4.1.3. Is the archive at or near the top of the sidebar?		√
4.2. Does your blog display a cloud or list of labels in the sidebar?	√
4.2.1. Do your labels include these required labels (typed accurately):	---	---
"books" (plural) AND "reviews" (plural)	√
"essays" (plural) AND "portfolios" (plural, without "proto-")	√
"quickposts" (plural, with no space between quick and posts)	√
"links" (plural) AND "media" (plural)	√
"movies" (plural) AND "websites" (plural)	√
"brainstorms" (or "brainstorming"), "essay prep.," AND "free-writing" (or "free-writes")	√
4.2.2. Does your sidebar display other labels?	√
How many other labels have you attached to three (3) or more posts? 45 other labels attached to three or more posts	---	---
Which labels, and to how many posts each? Please list those labels instead of www, xxx, yyy..., and list numbers of posts instead of n, m, o... (in parentheses), below. baseball (2) biography (2) birthday (2) blogs (33) blood type (1) Books (28) brainstorms (1) characters (2) drafts (3) essay prep. (6) Essays (17) favorites (5) festival (1) Free writing (3) Funeral of New Zealand (2) Harry Potter (1) International Cocktail Party (2) jobs (1) languages (5) links (2) media (1) morning and evening habits (1) movies (6) my cousin (1) my friends (3) New Zealand (1) News Quiz (2) opinion (3) outlines (2) portfolios (1) quickposts (1) Reading (2) report (2) Reviews (31) revisions (7) sea (1) signs (1) Speaking (14) Starbucks Coffee (1) suggestions (1) summer vacation (4) test (1) TOEIC (1) university life (2) websites (3)	---	---
4.3. Links and media	---	---
4.3.1. Do your blog posts this semester include photos or other graphics?	√
Does your blog profile include a photo or graphic representation?	√
How many of your blog posts this semester include photos or other graphics? 25 posts including photos or other graphics	---	---
4.3.2. Does your blog include posts with multiple links?	√
How many of your posts this semester include three (3) or more links? 22 posts including three or more links (including this portfolio!)	---	---
4.3.3. Does your blog include other media?		√
How many of your blog posts this semester include other media? 0 posts including other media	---	---
What kind(-s) of media have you included in posts this semester? Please list the kinds here: ... ... ...	---	---
What media content that you originally produced, if any, do your blog posts for this semester contain? Please list and explain each item briefly, and add short links and dates (yyyy.mm.dd) for reference. ... (short link, date) ... (short link, date) ... (short link, date)	---	---

4.4. Overall presentation

What have you done to enhance the overall presentation and readability of your blog? List and explain the three most important content, display, formatting, layout, or other presentation changes that you have made on your blog this semester.

1. ... I tried easy to see layout.
2. ... I changed display color and letter color.
3. ... I attached a lot of photo to read by reader.

5.0. ADDITIONAL REFLECTIONS ON YOUR BLOG AND YOUR WRITING FOR IT

Please feel free to include reflections on both class work and homework, as well as on the content of this portfolio (proto-portfolios, showcases, selections, and reflections).

• ... It was difficult for me to understand class work, so I asked my friends and assistants.
• ... I took a lot time for homework, because Writing class' homework always use a computer.
• ... I think this proto-portfolios was nice, but I felt that it is little longer.
  

6.0. ADVICE AND SUGGESTIONS FOR YOURSELF, YOUR PEERS, AND YOUR SUCCESSORS

• ... To myself: I had to write more regularly! I think I should keep blogging after finished Writing class!
• ... To my successor: I suggest you to write a lot of thing you did. Please find interesting things in your life.
• ... To my successor: I think that you should include a lot of pictures, links and medias.
  

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Notes:

1. This portfolio template derives from Writing Studio Blog templates for Writing IIIc and Writing IVc (2007-08), Writing III, §§1a & 1c, Writing IV: Portfolio, §§1a & 1c (2008-09), and the July 7, 2009, Portfolio for Writing III.
2. Please use the same code in section 0.0 that you used to embed your proto-portfolios (PPFs) in the footer of your blog, which you should already have revised to display your 2nd (fall) semester PPF first.
3. The essays section (1.0. Essays, above) derived from Proto-Portfolio 2-02 (2008).
   
4. The essay selection and explanation item (§1.2, above) differs from that in the July 7, 2009, Portfolio for Writing III. Please read the new item carefully before making a selection.

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(total: 14266 words)

BR 2-14 The Ant and the Grasshopper

I read “The Ant and the Grasshopper”. I have read before, but I want to read again. So I chose this book. I am going to write an summary of this book now.

Long time ago, there was a grasshopper who liked to sing and play. Also there was an ant who was very hard worker. One day, the grasshopper said the ant to come and play with me. But the answered “no”, because he had to prepare for winter. When winter came, the grasshopper had no food because he had been playing all summer. On the other hand, the ant rested comfortably in their homes with all the foods they need.

After I read it, I think that working hard is very important for our life. If we want to rest comfortably later, we should work hard.

(138 words, total: 12182 words)

snow!!

January 13th Wednesday, it was very cold day. But it was so happy day for me because it was snowing. I wake up early by my mother’s voice. My mother news me it was snowing. I opened my room curtain. Then I could see snow scene everywhere. I was surprised and feel cold. When I went to KGU in the morning, I was careful to watch my step. However I felt down from my bicycle. I felt very very ashamed. And a train which I intended to take was late.

I love snow but I don’t like cold temperature. I want that it is getting warmer more.

(107 words, total: 12044 words)

December 24

December 24 was Christmas Eve, so we had Christmas party in bakery in KGU. After Reading class, Yui and I went to down town. We bought a lot of snacks in Donkihote. We backed KGU and started Christmas party. We enjoyed eating a lot of snacks and chatting. This picture is the Christmas party in bakery.

After that, we had Speaking class. We presented some snacks to Mr. Waterman. He was ready to receive, so we were happy. Speaking class was very fun for me. We heard 2 Christmas songs, “Last Christmas” and “All I want for Christmas is you”. I like those songs so I had good time last class.

(111 words, total: 11937 words)

job!!

I am going to write about my job now.

First, I talk about my part-time job. I worked at Sobano in youmetown Hikarinomori. Sobano is specialty soba restaurant. I have worked there when I entered KGU. The reason why I chose there is that my high school’s senior invited me and Sobano’s uniform is unusual.
Sobano’s uniform is like a Japanese kimono. I am ashamed when I am wearing it but I like it. I usually work 4 days a week. I almost have classes until the fifth period and the club activity, so I don’t have enough time to work now.

Next, I talk about my future job. I want to be a cabin attendant or a grand staff. I dreamed of being it since I was a child. I especially want to be an ANA’s cabin attendant. When it says why ANA is good for me, the reason is because a uniform is pretty. This is the ANA’s uniform. It is cool and pretty, isn’t it?? In addition, the reason is because I sympathized with management policies of ANA. I go to Washington institute of language now to grant this dream. It is hard to be compatible with KGU. But I do my best to become a cabin attendant.

(211 words, total: 11826 words)

Cellular phone users should..

I think that cellular phone users should think about others when they use their phones in public. I am going to write about the reasons.

I go to school by train every morning. I often find many people use their cellular phones in the train. They send e-mail, listen to music and call on someone. I think that cellular phone users should think use of cellular phone in public. I do not think that they must not use cellular phone but I think need concern for other people because publics are used by many people. For example, they should lower the volume of music when they listen to music wearing earphone. I sometimes hear music over the earphone. Many people feel so good so they should lower the volume of music. In addition, cellular phone users should refrain from calling in public because it is difficult to keep their voice down when they talk by cellular phone. They annoy other people with this act so I think that they should refrain from calling in public. However, I think that send e-mail in public is not so bad because send e-mail is not make noise. They are careful of a call signal with melodies instead. I think that cellular phone users may use their cellular phones if they do not take the act that exhibits a lack of concern for other people in this way.

I wrote the opinion when I was a first grade students. I don't change this opinion still now.

(252 words, total: 11615 words)

William Bradley Pitt

I am going to write biography about William Bradley Pitt.

William Bradley Pitt is a famous American actor. He was born in 1963 in Oklahoma, America. In 1975, He attended Kickapoo High School, where he excelled; he was a member of the golf, tennis and swimming teams, as well as the Key and Forensics clubs. He also participated in school debates and musicals. Three years later, he entered university of Missouri. After he dropped out of this university and moved to Los Angels, California to take acting lessons. In 1986, he appeared on television program “Dallas” for the first time. Two years later, he received his first film role in “The Dark Side of the Sun”, where he played a young American taken by his family to the Adriatic to find a remedy for a skin condition. A few years later, he attracted broader public attention from a supporting role in “Thelma & Louise”. From 1992, he began to active as matinee idol in “River runs throw it”, “Interview with Vampire”, “Legend of fall” and so on. In 1995, He starred “Se7en” and “Twelve Monkeys” for which he won a Golden Globe for Best Performance by an Actor. Between 1999 and 2007, he achieved fame in “Fight Club”, as Rusty Ryan in “Ocean's Eleven”, its sequels “Ocean's Twelve” and “Ocean's Thirteen”. A few years later, He has had his biggest commercial successes with “Spy Game”, “Troy”, “Mr. & Mrs. Smith”, and “Burn After Reading”. In 2005, he was married to Angelina Jolie and he became the father of two children-in-law. The next year, his wife gave birth to a girl. He leads a full life solid officially and privately.

(279 words, total: 11363 words)

Mao Asada

I am going to describe to Mao Asada now.

She is eighteen years old and she goes to Tyukyo high school. She is still young but Japanese famous figure skater. She was born in Nagoya, Aichi. She originally started out studying ballet, but later switched to skating in 1995 when her sister, Mai Asada also switched from ballet to figure skating. She has much improved in skating. She landed her first triple axel jump at the age of 12, and she became the first lady to perform a triple-triple-triple. She comes to fame in the Japanese Championships when she was sixth grade. Afterward, she won the World Championships, the Four Continent championships and the Japanese Championships. Especially, she won Japanese Championships no less than three times. She is going to full activity over the world. I expect more her action.

(140 words, total: 11084 words)

melon bun

My way to eat melon bun is very strong. I introduce the way now.

First, I eat bottom the melon bun. Next, I hollow out of inside. Finally, I eat outside.

The reason why I eat by this way, I like outside of melon bun. I want to eat the part which I like last. Please try the way, when you eat melon bun.

(64 words, total: 10944 words)

BR 2-13 The Sun and the Wind

I read “The Sun and the Wind”. I like this story and recommend to children. I want to read this in English for my children when I become mother. So I tried to read this.

Long time ago, the sun and the wind were arguing about which was stronger. They decided that whoever could take off a traveler’s coat was the strongest. The wind was first and he blew an icy wind at the traveler. However traveler only snuggled deeper into his coat. Next was the sun. He was warming and lighting and glory. Soon the traveler took off his coat and the sun won.

After I read it, I think that the book was interesting afresh because I cannot generate idea that the sun and the wind were arguing. I think that Aesop who written by it was a genius in fairy tale.

(144 words, total: 10880 words)

BR 2-12 Icarus

I read “Icarus”. I had heard he name, but I didn’t know what he did. So I chose this book. I am going to write a summary of this book now.

There lived a man named Daedalus in the island of Crete. One day, Daedalus had angered King Minos because he had told the king’s daughter the secret to the Labyrinth. The king locked him with his son, Icarus. The island is difficult to leave because the king watches the sea. Daedalus made two beautiful sets of wings. They could fly easily by the wings. However these wings are machines and so they can break and the heat of thesun will melt the wax. So Daedalus advised Icarus but he forgot his father’s word quickly. Next day, Daedalus and Icarus flew out of the Labyrinth. Icarus flew higher, so he wax in his wings began to melt. A few minute later, he felt the sea.

After I read it, I think that we have to hear whatever person advised for us, or we can succeed. I don’t want to be like Icarus.

(182 words, total: 10736 words)

class reunion

After a coming-of-age celebration, I went to youme town and I showed my coworker to my figure of kimono. Then I back home and prepared for a class reunion of junior high school. I was an organizer, so I went to early and prepared. About 60 over people joined that, so I was grad very much. I enjoyed drinking and chatting with my schoolmate and my teachers very much.

After that, about 30 people went to post-party party. We went Ninjya Yashiki. We enjoyed very much. I didn’t meet my schoolmate long time no see but they weren’t change and we still have good relationships. I want to meet them again in the near future.

(115 words, total: 10554 words)

a coming-of-age celebration

January 11 was Coming of Age Day. I attended a coming-of-age celebration was held in Kumamoto city. I looked forward to the ceremony very much.

I woke up early because I had to go beauty salon to set my hair and put on Kimono. First, I had set my hair and made up my face. My hair style likes Anmitsu princess. I used ornamental hairpin which used my mother when she attended her coming-of-age celebration. After that, I had put on my Kimono. My kimono is red and tie-dyeing. My grand mother and father bought me that. I like it very much.

I finished the preparing for the coming-of-age celebration and I went to my friend house. The friend name is Kahori. We have been good friend since we are junior high school. I went to the celebration place with her and her boy friend, Shohei. When we arrived the celebration place, there is a lot of people. I could meet a lot of my friends and I took many pictures with my friends. They were very beautiful and cool. I was very glad to see a lot of friends long time no see. I think that the day was Memorial Day for me.

(204 words, total: 10439 words)

BR 2-11 Brer Rabbit and the Tar Baby

I read “Brer Rabbit and the Tar Baby”. I am going to write an summary of this book now.

Once upon a time, there was a fox and a rabbit. The fox was always trying to catch the rabbit. One day, the fox made figure of tar. When the rabbit saw the figure of tar, he talks to that. However the figure of tar did not say word. So the rabbit was angry and punched the figure of tar in the face and his paw sank into the tar. The fox appeared and tried to roast the rabbit. The rabbit said that do anything you want but please just don’t throw him into the briar patch. But the fox wanted to cause as much pain as he could to the rabbit, so he threw the rabbit into the briar patch. But the rabbit was born in the briar patch, so he was indifferent.

After read the book, I think that when people try to hurt anyone, they cannot succeed. If there was any kind of reason, I think people do not have to hurt.

(184 words, total: 10419 words)

International Cooktail Party

My name is Ann. I am from Canada of North America. I am 24 years old. My occupation is TV announcer and I am working at a local TV station. I appear on morning and evening news every day. I like sweets, so I try out the sweets at one on my free time. I am grad to offer the TV programs of sweets. I hate birds, because a bird attacked me when I was a child. I especially hate chicken but I like to eat chicken.

(87 words, total: 10235 words)

BIG!!

I ate a big custard pudding. The custard pudding taste strawberry and very delicious. I want to eat once more, but it was restrictive. Maybe I can eat last year.

(30 words, total: 10178 words)

★City Pirates★

I belong to City Pirates. Our club play baseball every Wednesday and go to various place. I like members in the club. There is only three women in the club, so I want to more women member. If you are interest our class, please contact me!!

(47 words, total: 10148 words)

Bird??

Haruna took a bird in KGU. Please look this picture and notice her bag!!

(14 words, total: 10101 words)

!!

I saw Santa Claus in KGU!! I was very very surprise!! The Santa Claus was hasty, because I saw him December 22.

(22 words, total: 10087 words)

Interesting member!!

December 7, Shiori, Yui and Haruna came to my house. First, we went to dinner at Kaiodo. This restaurant is very delicious. After that, we rent DVDs at Tsutaya and went my house. We enjoyed talking and drinking. We spent a good time. This member is very interesting.

(48 words, total: 10065 words)